Our Thriller TS, editing and text

Instead of using text from a computer, my group and I have decided to have written text on a whiteboard which I will film at home. I have taken into account the gothic, creepy type text and applied it to my own handwriting, which has hopefully come across. I have experimented with light and how the text will appear. I have tried panning the light across the text, so it starts in complete darkness and the light pans across to reveal the text, and I have tries just filming it appearing instantly. I will show the two shots to my group ad we will decide which one is better.